Release 48 Post Draft: Feedback Please

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Not nearly enough talk about me in this doc.

 

Docterfayce?
Docked Or Face?
Doc Tor Fa Cee?

Umm....

Hi.

 

There's several issues I found in this whole piece; It probably would be best to just give it a complete a rewrite.
Maybe something like:

"In Release 48, we were able to reduce load times even further and take our first steps towards improving frame rate! Frame rate still needs much more work though, and efforts in Release 49 will receive our first major focus in that area."

Neither comma is necessary here. The portion after 'but' is a dependent clause. If you just love commas though, you could restructure it as follows:

"While release 48 is a further iteration on our game loop, it is still missing a few key components and some balance. Expect this to expand with each subsequent release.

"With that said efforts to improve visual quality are ongoing" - Here there should be a comma after "With that said"


While my examples might not be perfect, I think they're an improvement.

 

good suggestions. Incorporated

 

• Artifact Repair, Salvage, Enchant, Masterwork: Artifacts have undergone a major refactor to better align them with the rest of the economy. In order to not have them directly compete with crafted goods, they can no longer be repaired like regular items. Instead, they can only be repaired by salvaging other artifacts to get “Artifact Essences” that are used in Artifact repair. This will cycle Artifacts out of the economy and require players to re-acquire them periodically (thereby simulating “production”). Additionally, we have made Artifacts a bit more dynamic by giving players the ability to enchant and masterwork them.

In QA build 587 - currently the item from salvaging artifacts is called "Ancient Essence".

The name should be consistent - one way or the other.

 

good catch. fixed

 

There is a rogue bullet point between "Top 10 Priorities for Launch" and "I want to express a huge..." in the first paragraph.

 

Shouldn't it be "many bugs" as they can be counted.
Also I would suggest to rephrase the sentence to something like "I want to express a huge amount of gratitude to the backers who tested the below listed items on the QA server. They found many bugs and also provided editorial feedback on this post so that it is easy to read and actually matches what is in the game."

 

The other level 1 bullets are in "past tense" (e.g. "We added") - I am not certain what was done for story and what will be done in future releases. Also there's quiet a bit of "add" in that paragraph.
Perhaps this could be clarified like "We continued adding sidequests to and polishing the Paths of Truth, Love and Courage. Especially we introduced unique virtue themed rewards to these quests. We also continued polishing the game experience in the starting scenes." - Are starting scenes = outskirts / NUE or the Battle for Highvale/Solace Bridge / Blood River scenes?

 

Shouldn't it be "Ferig's Battle Camp" as its the name of a place?

 

"Elf corpses" and "elves" ...

 

I believe decay should be in small letters outside the Title - uncertain about "Revive"... if it is the generic non-spell resurrection it should be spelled small, if it is the title of the above bullet point spelling I believe a capital R is ok.

 

(SFX) is redundant, could be removed

 

I might have missed it - but were the watchers called Minions before? I was confused at first until I made the link to the watchers. Perhaps "constructs" or "watchers" is easier to understand.

VO = Voice Over?

 

Will the release use Unity 2017.2?

 

this is likely either artifact of google web publish or just an interim artifact of text in progress. I don't see this

 

Good edit. Incorporated

 

It is ALWAYS this way because the non-italics text is the original text from the Q4 update which is future tense while the italic text is what we did do so past tense. So not sure what I can do there.

UPDATE: I updated the KEY to better explain this.

Also starting scenes includes not just the outskirts but other scenes like Battle of Highvale, Blood River Massacre, Isle of Storms, and Battle of Solace Bridge.

 

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